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blackrose
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 Posted: Tue Dec 06, 2005 11:24 am Post subject: 'Silver Bells - the Bah Humbug version' |
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a twinge of guilty as I walk by
avert my gaze so as not to see
but the jingling follows, inside my head
with its accusations and it's singular plea
on every street corner
with red buckets and bells
no escape from this relentless
salvation army hell
'I'll give you five dollars
if you promise to stop
just for a minute
'til I circle the block'
such a small pittance
to ease this niggling guilt
on the working middle class
are these charities built
not secure in our prospects
so appeasement we buy
with the time honored rift
'there could go I'
so I drop in my dollars
my pennies, my dimes
just to ease the blare
of those goddamned silver chimes...
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Xirian
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| Posted: Wed Dec 07, 2005 6:33 pm Post subject: |
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That's very good. LOL I've never really celebrated Christmas or any holiday for that matter (yes even birthdays) so, I've learned to block much of those sounds out, when I can.
I know I'm broke, so I don't feel bad not giving to charity. In all actuality, I could be a charity case. LOL But the sentiments of your poem are very applicable to the season.
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blackrose
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| Posted: Tue Dec 13, 2005 9:50 am Post subject: |
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funny story...
I went to one of these people today to drop in the change from my coffee. She asked how I was and I said 'fine' and I asked her and, with glassy eyes, she said 'tired'. "Tired of that bell" I said, with a smile. "Yes... it follows me in my dreams... "
Poor girl... I wish her a Happy Holidays, after the bells... (which aren't even silver anymore... )
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Xirian
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| Posted: Tue Dec 13, 2005 10:55 am Post subject: |
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I could never volunteer for such a thing. Poor girl. 
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Rain Tree Wolf
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| Posted: Wed Dec 21, 2005 11:00 pm Post subject: |
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 hah hah hah...thanks for this poem! How true it is!
Really great Poem too, very witty.
Yeah, little by little I have been reading through both yours and Darkk poetry...very much enjoying the reads.
I'm on another forum, where I think some of the ladies over there would love this poem...may I share it with them? If so, should I put by blackrose at the bottom and a link to this site...or what??? |
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blackrose
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| Posted: Thu Dec 22, 2005 8:23 am Post subject: |
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Thank you, and of course you may share it. Tagging it by 'blackrose' should be fine - if you want, you can link to my poetry page on my website: http://blackrose.darkk.net/poetry (this particular one is not listed, however, else I'd give you that link... )
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Rain Tree Wolf
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| Posted: Thu Dec 22, 2005 8:50 am Post subject: |
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| Very Awesome! Thank you....I know these ladies will love this one |
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Rain Tree Wolf
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Yes, your poem has been well received.
I love your perspective concerning the easing of of the middle class's guilt...it made me stop and think a little on how that might apply but I can see it in all actuality.
I really like this;
| Quote: | so I drop in my dollars
my pennies, my dimes
just to ease the blare
of those goddamned silver chimes... |
It is so freaking awesome in the way the words drop and trickle like coins felt and touched one by one before they are parted with ( an awareness as to the value of that change is to you...it's not a fist full of change, it's not my change or my collective coins...it's individual coins which states extreme awareness of money even down to pennies).
There is so much genius in the closure of this poem, it thrills me. I like Dollars...pure and simple, no bills at the end. Dollars makes me think of hollers and has exasperation in it's sound. Pennies, such awareness, one who counts pennies...precious. And Dimes makes me think of crimes...
the in-tire closure just sighs in resolution too, I get such a feeling of conceding, unwilling appeasing.
The whole poem also makes me whence...LOL
Very well done, in my opinion. |
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blackrose
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I'm glad the poem was well-received... and that you enjoyed it so much. I kinda feel bad... because I didn't put half as much thought into writing it as you seem to have reading it...
I feel like I cheated or something... heh 
Still glad you liked it, tho... 
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Rain Tree Wolf
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| blackrose wrote: | I'm glad the poem was well-received... and that you enjoyed it so much. I kinda feel bad... because I didn't put half as much thought into writing it as you seem to have reading it...
I feel like I cheated or something... heh
Still glad you liked it, tho... |
Well, I don't know if you paint or not but I have found sometimes that if something gets over worked one can loose the life in it. When something just works it just works.
I don't think that you had to be fully conscious of everything that was being represented in your poem.
I had to really look at the poem and ask what is this, this that I'm picking up on, why is this so intriguing and fascinating to me...what is it???...so
Don't you see the insight I had about the money being dropped into the bucket??? Isn't it also cool that that is something given to the reader that makes it work, even though you were not set on intending it?
I don't know. I get this sort of response from other poets sometimes when I have a love for something about what they write and express it....it baffles me, really. I think the poet gets too close to their own work sometimes that they can not look at it with a perspective that is no longer their own.
Perhaps it is the same thing I do with my painting.... |
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blackrose
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| Posted: Thu Dec 29, 2005 8:58 am Post subject: |
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| Rain Tree Wolf wrote: | | Don't you see the insight I had about the money being dropped into the bucket??? Isn't it also cool that that is something given to the reader that makes it work, even though you were not set on intending it? |
Yes - it is cool. All I can think is that "I just needed something to fit the rhythm and rhyme with chime... " - but I'm certainly glad that someone can get something more meaningful out of it
| Quote: | I don't know. I get this sort of response from other poets sometimes when I have a love for something about what they write and express it....it baffles me, really. I think the poet gets too close to their own work sometimes that they can not look at it with a perspective that is no longer their own.
Perhaps it is the same thing I do with my painting.... |
Perhaps. Who knows? To me - this was just a funny little thing I wrote at lunch one day... half out of desire to write *something*, as I hadn't in awhile... and spurned by the first of the Salvation Army bells of the season... It's not even very well-written - of course, people always seem to like the poems best that I think are throw-aways. It's an odd sort of thing - and it always strikes me as oddly amusing... but I'm always glad when someone like something I wrote... (tho I do get a little depressed that they never really like the ones I think are my best) *shrugs* 
Irony... gotta love irony...
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blackrose
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 *bump*
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blackrose
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"... he who dares not grasp the thorn... should not crave the rose..."
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Impqueen
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Lol, I don't think I know the tune though
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